A poem that totally sucks!

[oneighty]

An Epic Poem.

By 180.

I wish to write an epic poem
one about a mile long.

A poem that touches here and there
a poem that touches everywhere.

A poem full of wit and rime
that one could read at any time.

Creeping about upon your knees
creeping about among the trees.

A poem with no beginning
that has no ending.

So I writ it on this
Mobius Strip.

Sigh.

[sadinred]

1. Very "Where The Sidewalk Ends". I think

you should continue and make it A Mile Long!!!! I like it.

[oneighty]

2. Scifi

story I read long time ago. Man built his house on a Mobius strip. Just think of the possibilities!

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[Warpy]

3. I liked the tesseract house that went very wrong

Just a minor pedantic quibble, "rime" is frost. Did you mean "rhyme?"

[oneighty]

6. No I meant to use Rime

As in 'Rime of the Ancient Mariner'

One of my very favorite story/poems. A fellow DUer sent me a nine by twelve inch illustrated book of the 'Rime'--a treasure indeed.

Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Illustrations by Gustave Dor'e.

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[JitterbugPerfume]

7. Hey sadinred

is "Where the sidewalk ends" a Sci fi story? a poem?

Tell me

I am very intrigued by that title

[sadinred]

8. Ummm. Very big when I was little. Let me find a link.... gimme a

minute.
Might need help posting a link too.

[JitterbugPerfume]

9. OK by the way-----

welcome to DU

greatest little site on the web<smile>

[sadinred]

10. link...

it was really REALLY cool poetry for kids (and grown ups too). I think it's the same guy the wrote The Giving Tree.

Hope the link works. If not go to Amazon.


http://www.amazon.com/gp/reader/0060256672/ref=sib_dp_pt/102-1423270-3255344#reader-link

[JitterbugPerfume]

11. thanks

Shel Silversiein----I love him !!!

[sadinred]

13. Yay! n/t

[auntAgonist]

4. it does NOT totally suck :)

I thought it was cool.

[JitterbugPerfume]

5. I like your poem Ed

poetry should have joy --and love for life

your poetry had that!

even the sad ones have it

[oneighty]

12. I like it I like it!

"It does not totally suck."

Just a little bit. Hee hee hee!

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[lesterhalfjr]

14. I don't know anything about poetry

But I am reading a book of poems called "Pencil Letters" now. It was written by a russian woman while she was in a kgb jail. I like the parts i can understand. Guided by Voices lyrics are probably the closest thing to poetry I have any knowledge of "post christmas, cup cake hand grenade...SOUL TRAIN COLLEGE POLICEMAN!"

[oneighty]

15. "I don't know anything about poetry"

And neither do I. Over the years I have written some story/poems only because I wanted to. Maybe in 70 years I have written twenty poems.

Welcome to DU lesterhalfjr

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