oneighty
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Tue Apr-26-05 06:36 PM
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| Batten Down the Hatches Two |
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She brought me fresh water In her portable vessel And poured it from Her mouth to mine.
And the foods she chewed is passed to me Like the water, kissed from her mouth to mine And I lay helpless there with mouth wide open Like a baby bird hungry and waiting for food.
Her hands soft tender gentle caressing Nursed me and healed all my wounds And hand in hand with my heart beating faster We wandered her Nipponese land.
In the quiet of night I lay close beside her Whispering to her of my love. She listened quiet breathing sighing singing And she sings to me of her Siren song.
I sang the song my Siren song To bring you here to me And you must obey the Siren's song And you must be loving me.
Later on a mountain's top We stood above rocks and sea I love you my Captain she breathed to me My lover a love a love that cannot be.
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Droopy
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Wed Apr-27-05 06:18 PM
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| 1. I'm beginning to like love poems |
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I used to never like them and I hated love songs, but I think that my hardened soul is starting to soften.
Good job, oneighty. Have you ever had anything published? Your writing is professional grade in my opinion. I'm no critic or master of the language, but I know good writing when I see it.
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Thu Apr-28-05 06:34 PM
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a tribute to Kazuko, and to undying love
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