superconnected
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Thu Jun-09-05 02:31 AM
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| Haiku Thread - you are invited to post |
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Edited on Thu Jun-09-05 02:35 AM by superconnected
remember three lines:
5 syllables 7 syllables 5 ayllables
Here's some of mine:
Waking Up
bolt upright, dry throat yanked awake gasping for air again, the tears come
Drowning
I watched you drown on beaches and in courtyards. In crowds death smelled of wine
Shedding light on the truth
yes, you made your point if it got any brighter I'd die from the light
marooned convertible
A marooned ripped top old Buick, he shared with his son fadded the drive way
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Thu Jun-09-05 04:46 PM
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Edited on Thu Jun-09-05 04:46 PM by JacobPike
Through dark glowing clouds I climb, breaking the surface under newborn sky.
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Sat Jun-18-05 07:30 PM
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no fruit came from you you left too young, my brother a branch truncated.
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Mon Jun-27-05 09:33 AM
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I see the pain is still evident.
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Fri Aug-19-05 04:09 PM
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Death is like Winter Full of cold and bitterness But Spring is coming
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Fri Aug-19-05 04:12 PM
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a country at war people divided again history repeats
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Mon Aug-22-05 08:46 PM
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| 7. More rules than just 5 7 5 |
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In that short space a reference to season is almost mandatory. A literary or song reference is also considered good form. Ideally the seasonal reference should indicate the passage of time in a classical reference to weather, flowers, or even creatures. Ideally the literary reference would be a famous haiku. Or one that has been shared previously with the recipients.
Get along home, Rush. Your days are shortening now. Denying Cindy.
In hot sun, Cindy, Waits for a wing nut Caesar. My heart is with her.
No ditto for Rush, nor rush for Rush addicted Clean new wind, come soon.
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Sun Jan-15-06 12:30 PM
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Insomnia.
We have heard of it: This languid singing, the night, And so lie longing.
Dreaming.
The screams fall to earth A kind of gelatin curse Flesh, all flesh, the dark.
Awake.
The cups that hold us Say nothing of the cold sun Or suspended clouds
Conscious.
What we dream is dire, The drifts, the wire, muddy snow, Passage, passage, test.
Feed.
What whine is this red? How do our skies rain such blood? Who will tell us this?
Rest.
Death, we say, is sleep. The moons come. They are our hours, The slow trudge of pain.
Lie.
We embrace these voids. The Pleiades have no comment. Still we think they sigh.
NNadir - 1/15/06
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sweetheart
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Wed Jan-18-06 10:05 PM
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whatya fuck ttheyre no rules but then there might be some but then again not.
! haiku done wrongly! !!
! not haiku! not poetry!!!!
! rather just words, meanings, intents, and the feelings of a poet.
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Tue Feb-07-06 09:18 AM
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no name mother had for me, being by being names me
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Fri Mar-31-06 11:26 AM
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Edited on Fri Mar-31-06 11:26 AM by SteppingRazor
Stupid President People who voted for you Are even dumber
On edit: Hi folks! My first post in the poetry group. Maybe I'll add something more substantial later :hi:
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Mon Jul-17-06 12:04 AM
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A cloud tinged with pink, Blows in the twilight breezes And then fades to gray
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Mon Aug-28-06 04:24 PM
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A snowfall at night. Windchimes hanging motionless above the garden.
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Tue Sep-05-06 02:26 AM
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  Autmn morning light Prey struggles in spider's orb One red maple leaf
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Sun Dec-03-06 12:02 AM
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Through cracks in the sky the land where the sunset bleeds. Whose blood? Everyone's.
Momentum
A new heartbeat is sweet, clear, faster, open to shots I thought I'd blocked.
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Sat Jun-27-09 03:12 PM
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| 16. My first adventure into this forum. |
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What a treasure! Hope you don't mind if I stay. This is also my first attempt at Haiku, so please feel free to critique. I'd appreciate it.
Trees in Winter
Naked, shivering in stark contrast to the snow lift gnarled fingers skyward
Heatwave
Sun Dog howls at earth Breath hot, humid, fetid We melt, puddling at his feet
The Gossips
What do we tell them Gossip mongers lurking Mind your own business
Vindication
Told you so, I did But you would not believe me Now, reap what you sow
Night Garden
Night garden, all white Shimmering in the moonlight Perfuming the breeze
Abandoned
How could you do this Leave me without saying goodbye or turning to look
Campfire
Flames licking the sky Dancing, swaying in darkness Holding back the night
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Fri Nov-13-09 02:39 AM
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| 17. April 15, 1926 - November 11, 2007 |
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his urn of ashes marked the commemoration on Veterans Day
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Fri Jan-01-10 02:25 AM
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a child's red notebook
on the neighbors' frozen pond---
last day of the year
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Mon Jan-04-10 09:08 PM
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One, two, three, four, five Numbers rule the world we live Without a scent we contrive.
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