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Wed Aug-03-05 02:24 PM
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I have to cut twenty words.....
ARGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHH
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:24 PM
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:25 PM
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| 2. I need to get from 670 to 650........ |
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I need to walk away for awhile...
But any advise would be highly appreciated
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| Kire
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:27 PM
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| 3. cut every thirtieth word |
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take them to the deli and have them thinly sliced
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| WCGreen
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:42 PM
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| 11. That is good, and they stack much higher that way |
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:28 PM
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| 4. Before walking away...save what you have. |
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:29 PM
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| 5. Oh yea.... This stuff might actually get published.... |
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I have to be verrrrrry careful
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:34 PM
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| 6. That is tough...you would do good to walk away from it for awhile.... |
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It will be easier after you have some distance from it...the prose won't look quite so precious later...Just my take on it...I've tried it, and it helps me...
Good luck, my dear WCGreen!
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:35 PM
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| 7. Why thank you sweet peggy |
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:36 PM
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| 8. Hmmmm, maybe, eliminate, some, words, and, add, commas? |
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:) :hug: I'm sorry. Is there a sentence or two that you could combine? Good luck!
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:37 PM
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| 9. leave out that bit about the red pony |
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:41 PM
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| 10. But the red pony makes the story.... |
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:47 PM
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| 13. it's only 650 words. there's no room for allegory. |
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the author's got to stick with the cow metaphor only, or it's going to read like a cheap ripoff of Don Quixote. The pony's got to go, even if the careful reader sees it's really a symbol of postmodern divergence into spiritualism and oxymoronity.
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:56 PM
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you forgot bankrupt morality
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:49 PM
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| 14. PM it to me if you really want suggestions |
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I'm by no means a pro, but I have done some copy-editing, and sometimes it's easier when you haven't been staring and staring at it!
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:55 PM
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Changed some tenses and got rid of a few modifiers...
Lean and mean and 650 words....
Thanks for the help.......
It's been a long time since I had to submit to an editor.....
I still may PM you later, after I let it stew for awhile......
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:55 PM
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You're still welcome to PM it if you'd like feedback! :)
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:57 PM
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Wed Aug-03-05 02:57 PM
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| 19. You could NEVER be mean and lean, my dear WCGreen....oh... |
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you mean the PROSE? excuse me.....*sneaking away....*
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