A Poem

[Haole Girl]

It's very immature, as far as poetry goes, but here it is:


"Pain"

It was late
And I didn’t even know
How the demons of my
Past would show

Twenty one years ago
Still, it seems so new…
And it seems so real

Who knew?

And it doesn’t stay still
In my restless mind tonight

And, I fight..
And I cry…late.
When nobody knows..
They are still at the gate.

All these years
All those tears…
Go away… go away

But, it stays..
Ever close..
The edge…of the knife…
Of pain.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

1. My dear KC2!

I want you to know how much I like your poem, sweetie.........

I think you are onto something.....

Very nice!

One tiny suggestion...don't rhyme if it doesn't come naturally for you...

Of course, do it, if you find the words want to come out that way...

Don't force yourself!

Let the words out any old which way...as you feel them!

Then you will be in touch with your muse, and the words will be wonderful...

I like this a lot, sweetie!

:loveya: :hug:

[wildhorses]

2. yep--good starting place

is this your first? keep at it :hi: