CaliforniaPeggy
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:25 PM
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My newest poem, ready for prime time...Flame |
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Ah, your tongue is a flame I’m glowing now I want to be burned By you
We will create a space upon the grass
Where we will wrap and twist and coil
The wind might blow over us But we’ll never feel it pass
The dark shade of the trees Will hide us From everyone They’ll never see us there They won’t see us come undone
They won’t see us completed They won’t see us become One.
Ah, your tongue is a flame There will be no end to us Or our ecstasy...
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:27 PM
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1. Thank you, my dear CaliforniaPeggy! |
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:29 PM
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:29 PM
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2. Better loosen the collar a bit... |
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:31 PM
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Yours? Or mine?
Thanks, sweetie...:hug:
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:29 PM
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:32 PM
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Oh, thank you, sweetie...
Glad you do!
:hi:
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:30 PM
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5. You certainly have a way with words |
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This kind of reminds me of e e cummings...
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:34 PM
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Wow, thank you!
I admire his work so damn much!
:hi:
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:31 PM
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:35 PM
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11. My dear PBS Poll-435! |
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Glad you think so!
Thank you...
:hi:
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:32 PM
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7. You words paint a picture |
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evoking memories warm and lingering..Bless you :blush:
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:37 PM
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I am so glad that my little work evokes such warm memories...
Thank you...
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:32 PM
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Peggy what's gotten into you?
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:38 PM
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It is rather...
What's gotten into me?
Nothing!
I'm just finding my voice...;-)
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:50 PM
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14. This is so sexy. It's a great poem. |
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I'm in love with someone now. I wish I could kiss him and feel his tongue inside me. Everyone knows who it is, so I won't say his name. :loveya:
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:53 PM
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15. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, my dear elshiva... |
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Thank you, sweetie...
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Sun Feb-22-09 11:54 PM
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16. Thank YOU! Really captures the mood. |
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Mon Feb-23-09 01:02 AM
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18. This poem would have warmed up the crowd |
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in Washington DC on January 20.
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Mon Feb-23-09 01:14 AM
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20. My dear Lionel Mandrake! |
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I think you're correct...
It was a pretty cold day!
:hi:
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Mon Feb-23-09 01:13 AM
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19. I've never seen welding described quite so vividly |
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Naw...just funnin'
I liked it.
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Mon Feb-23-09 01:23 AM
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22. My dear OmahaBlueDog! |
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Welding?
:rofl:
You make me laugh, sweetie...
Glad you like it!
Thank you...
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Mon Feb-23-09 01:20 AM
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21. My previous comments stand unchanged |
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Except to say it's even better now.
Sending you a PM in a few.
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Mon Feb-23-09 01:25 AM
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23. My dear Prisoner_Number_Six... |
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Thank you, sweetie...
I am so honored!
I did hesitate to further edit it, after what you said before...
But I truly felt that the little change I made did make it stronger...
Thank you...
:hug:
I will be alert to your PM.
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Mon Feb-23-09 08:16 AM
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that was a bit....steamy! Very well done! :D
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Mon Feb-23-09 12:22 PM
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Ah, sweetie...
So glad you enjoyed this!
There's life in the old dame yet...;)
Thank you!
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Mon Feb-23-09 12:24 PM
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Mon Feb-23-09 12:30 PM
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I did finish it! I'll be reading it tomorrow night at the open mic!
Thanks for coming by, sweetie...
Thank you for the applause...
I hope you feel much better today!
:hug:
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Mon Feb-23-09 12:34 PM
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I feel a little better today. It feels like the cold that never ends, though. :hug:
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Mon Feb-23-09 12:38 PM
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Would it be copyright infringement if I were to use this for, uh, something? :hide:
Well done, girl. You're such a talented woman. :hug:
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Mon Feb-23-09 12:42 PM
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Edited on Mon Feb-23-09 12:42 PM by CaliforniaPeggy
I would be honored in the extreme if you were to use this for something! Just with proper attribution...
And thank you!
Your very kind remarks mean a lot to me...
Occasionally the words come out the way I want them to.
:hug:
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Mon Feb-23-09 12:48 PM
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Thank you for the wonderful imagery, CP! :thumbsup: :thumbsup:
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Mon Feb-23-09 12:51 PM
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32. My dear 3.14158675309! |
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Hehehe...
Thank you for the wonderful compliments!
:hug:
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Mon Feb-23-09 07:21 PM
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33. Just had to bump this up |
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Wonderful poem Peggy. All of the lovers out there can relate to your words.
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Mon Feb-23-09 07:38 PM
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34. My dear raptor_rider... |
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Thank you, sweetie...
For your very kind words, and for the bump...
I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
And it's my hope that all the lovers who've read this can relate to it too...
:hug:
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