CaliforniaPeggy
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Wed Apr-29-09 12:33 AM
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Tonight's poem from the open mic..."The Crumb" |
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The crumb bothers my lip; it distracts and annoys me It buzzes at me the way a fly does I twitch my finger to make it gone And I flex my lip too
So that’s what it feels like To kiss your mouth, to feel your muscles and your strength How I wish I were kissing you
Instead of having just a crumb Here on my lip
© MLC
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Wed Apr-29-09 01:00 AM
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... yet another emotion, a snapshot in our collective emotional lives, captured by your pen.
Not skewered with malice, but pinned to the heart - reverently, like a corsage affixed to a dress on prom night; like a dream of what could have been attached, with care and courage, to the heart.
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Wed Apr-29-09 01:05 AM
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Jeez, girl.......it's just a crumb!:P
Thank you, sweetie...
It means so much, especially from a writer of your caliber...
:hug:
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Wed Apr-29-09 02:12 AM
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Wed Apr-29-09 11:24 AM
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5. Thank you, my dear elshiva! |
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Wed Apr-29-09 04:43 AM
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Wed Apr-29-09 11:25 AM
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6. Thank you, my dear LaurenG! |
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Wed Apr-29-09 03:07 PM
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So I'm just reading along, nice descriptive lines about this annoying crumb.
Then "Blam!"--It went all erotic on me!
I like surprises!
Nice one, Peg!!!
:loveya:
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Wed Apr-29-09 03:16 PM
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Ha! I like surprises too; this ending came to me in a flash and it surprised me!
You should have heard the crowd at the open mic last night...
There was a burst of laughter and sharp applause as I ended.
;)
I'm so glad you liked it...
Thank you, sweetie!
:loveya:
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