My letter to Congress. Please critique. An editor would be appreciated

[me b zola]

Congressman/Senator________________,


I am writing to you with deep sorrow and intense outrage for what was done to the people of New Orleans. Untold numbers have died in New Orleans not from Katrina, but from gross incompetence, & criminal negligence.

All of this was entirely preventable. A US Naval ship followed Katrina to shore, prepared to assist with fresh water, food, and medical assistance. It sat there waiting for orders that never came. Aid and assistance was turned away repeatedly. Boats, busses, police officers, firefighters, rescuers, medical assistance, food & water were all turned away by FEMA in too many separate incidents to count. No water or food assistance came until Mr. Bush came, five days later, for a photo-op. That is criminal.


The failure of FEMA and the agency that it works under, Homeland Security, is well documented. The failure of Mr. Bush to immediately remove those who are responsible for untold deaths by their incompetence is criminal negligence. While the people of New Orleans were suffering in a living hell, Mr. Bush attended a birthday party, played golf, made political speeches, and made a stop to sell his agenda. It wasn’t until Mr. Bush began to feel the political heat did he shorten his vacation by one day. .

Imagine the CEO of a company patting on the back a manager working for him that was responsible for the deaths of thousands of people due to his gross incompetence. If you were a shareholder would you demand the resignation of that CEO? The simple answer is do not focus on the manager who created such devastation. Get rid of the CEO who continues to place faith in such a manager. The new CEO will replace whom ever needs to be replaced.

Mr. Bush has repeatedly refused to fire those whose blatant incompetence has cost the lives of untold numbers of our fellow citizens. We will never know how many of those people died as a result of the criminal neglect of the federal government. I urge you to use your voice to force the resignation or impeachment of the entire Bush administration. There needs to be a congressional investigation in addition to a criminal investigation, but first the safety of our nation and it’s citizens must be secured. The evidence that we are not in capable hands is overwhelming. Our national security depends on strong and competent leadership, leadership that does not currently exist in our Executive Office.



Thank You,

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[asjr]

1. Excellent letter. Maybe our congresspeople will start

to realize the citizens are not stupid.

[me b zola]

2. Thank you. Writing does not come easy for me

If you have any critiques, I am willing to listen :D

[Diogenes2]

3. Superb letter!

Tiny typographical nitpick: near the end "our nation and it's citizens"-- the its needs no apostrophe. Best of luck!

[asjr]

4. Believe the apostrophe is correct.