Reply #18: You see? [View All]

[peruban]

Not too easy to decide on the right words, is it? The second line could be also translated as "Blows as if from the hatred of God; as if before them", also "abren zanjas oscuras" could be more properly translated as "open dark trenches" instead of "mark dark grooves". And "deep crumblings" does no justice to "caidas hondas" which would literally mean "deep fallings". And a "palmada" is more personal than a "tap", more like being grabbed by the shoulder. Also, "Yo no se!" is more properly translated as "I do not know", the insertion of the word "that" creates a linking with the line that doesn't exist in the original, the author is simply exclaiming "he does not know" as a way of proclaiming his inability to describe the emotion he is presenting. There are other examples of his work that I could mention, like his collection of poems "Trilce", a title which has no translation. But you see what I mean.