Haole Girl
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:15 PM
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I've been thinking about some of the recent threads in the Lounge... |
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Edited on Wed Jan-09-08 11:20 PM by KC2
..and I wrote this poem tonight.
It's for some of the women in the Lounge, who are going through difficult times, and it's for me, too. :hug:
"The Mirror"
She sees her face in the mirror In the morning light A wrinkle never noticed before
How quickly the years go by How difficult it seems to say good bye To the way her smile could open doors And the way it feels to be invisible Much more difficult than before
She thinks of that hat of straw And the glimpse in the mirror she saw with her face beet red The garden was hot that day And she laughed at twenty At the image she saw And hoped it would be quaint Or respectable Or easy to age She could not have been more wrong if she’d been truly insane And wonders why a person so jaded would still feel pain
She quickly washes her hands Not even looking as she leaves And knowing sooner or later She’s going to have to believe In herself and her strength
Searching deep down inside she knows she has the will to survive She’s used it all along Though carried by her beauty and smile
Now she truly finds out what others warned her for years And she knows she is able It’s time to face her fears.
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:19 PM
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1. Beautiful, KC2. One tiny error... |
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Just fix the spelling of "beet" in the phrase on Line 12... unless you mean "beat" as in the Kerouac sense.
From Radio Lady Ellen (woman, wife, mother, stepmother, grandmother, stepgrandmother) and aging as gracefully as possible while sometimes shunning the mirror...
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Haole Girl
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:24 PM
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Thank you for helping me with the spelling, too! I'm the world's worst speller!! :hi:
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:28 PM
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:29 PM
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:30 PM
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Wow, that's just beautiful...
And so true as well...
Thank you for your perceptiveness, sweetie...
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Haole Girl
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:34 PM
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You helped inspire me to try to write poetry again. So, thank you! :hug:
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:44 PM
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9. I am so glad I inspired you! |
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You just never know where your influence will make a difference, do you?
You have a gift here...pursue it!
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Haole Girl
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Thu Jan-10-08 09:19 AM
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Edited on Thu Jan-10-08 09:33 AM by KC2
I hope, in my life, I've made a difference in at least a couple of lives (in a positive way!). Thank you again. :hug:
edit: Thank you for saying I have a gift. :hug:
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:39 PM
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Beautiful, sweet, and TALENTED too. Who knew?
Lovely poem. I'm impressed. :)
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Haole Girl
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Wed Jan-09-08 11:41 PM
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Very kind of you to say that! :-)
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Thu Jan-10-08 09:23 AM
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it brought a tear to my eye....keep up the good work....
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Thu Jan-10-08 09:25 AM
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I hope it didn't make you sad. :hug:
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Thu Jan-10-08 09:26 AM
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I thought it was wonderful :hug: :applause:
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Thu Jan-10-08 12:15 PM
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18. I'm so glad it didn't bring you down. |
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Thank you for the nice compliment! :hug:
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Thu Jan-10-08 02:20 PM
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23. I felt like you were talking right to me |
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always a sign of good writing, I hope you keep at it.....you have talent, and thank you as your poem inspired me to take a stab at poetry again, and thanks to Californa Peggy for inspiring you to write it....if I write anything I'm pleased with, I'll be sure to post it.
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Thu Jan-10-08 09:25 AM
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Thank you for sharing your soul with us...
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~MB~
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Haole Girl
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Thu Jan-10-08 09:26 AM
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Even when I try not to share myself, it comes out! lol
Thanks, again. :hug:
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Thu Jan-10-08 09:29 AM
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I totally relate. Some days, I can't look into that mirror.
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Thu Jan-10-08 09:31 AM
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Thu Jan-10-08 01:31 PM
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19. beautiful and eloquent... |
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just like you :)
:hug:
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Thu Jan-10-08 01:43 PM
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That is the nicest thing anybody has said to me in a very long time. Thank you so much! :-) :hug:
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Thu Jan-10-08 02:08 PM
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21. it is very uplifting . . . |
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thanks for sharing this . . .
i'm printing it out and will hang it up.
you're a dear.
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Thu Jan-10-08 04:06 PM
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Thank YOU!! I'm honored! :hug:
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Thu Jan-10-08 02:09 PM
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22. nice post Emily Dickinson! |
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