Emerald

[Wetzelbill]

Yeah, I'm just screwing around with this. Stil working on it etc.. doesn't really have a name yet.



Emerald sails freely in the blue-green sea
While I lie awash in the waves foaming
crest. Lulling, basking, dreaming that Marx
does not matter. Was not raining in my ears
Ahead there is illumination. Bright. Golden
Blinding. Flashing brilliant rainbows. Green.
Blue. Red. Yellow. Black. Each one shimmering
in thrall. "Liberation is a historical and not a
mental act" both she and Marx say. This makes
me long for freedom. Liberty from gorgeous
colors. From this waves flashing tidal pull.
Ebbing constantly. Continuously. Endlessly.
Etched, scorched into my mind. Sometimes I
believe turquoise is the color of Goddesses.

Sometimes I wish to be springtime holding
close the emerald beauty of this world.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

1. My dear Wetzelbill.....

I LIKE this.....very vivid images! Yes, it does need some work, I think.

I feel like its focus needs to be made more clear......

But I very much like your imagery!


Is the "she" mentioned above the Goddess? Or who is she? That was a tiny bit confusing....

But still.....I like it! :applause: :applause:

[Wetzelbill]

2. poetry is not supposed to be clear

that's most of the point of it, so it can be read over about 100 times and the reader can learn more each time. Although, it would be pretty difficult to fully grasp this one and what I was doing and how I came to write it.

She is someone you would have to figure out. She does fit the general goddess idea though. It's supposed to be difficult to figure out, because I want the reader to think about it, correlate their own experiences to something I said, etc.

Glad you like the images. I'm messing around with it still a little. I want it to have a delusional, confusing like effect. Lots of imagery, but open for lots of expression.

[NMMNG]

3. I like it

It gives me the feeling of breaking free from something that held me captive for a very long time. :applause:

[Wetzelbill]

4. yeah that's sort of the effect

that or trying to break free. Glad you liked it. :)